What were you doing 10 years ago?
I was rather young at the time...I had just moved to Provo, Utah for the first time, and I spent the summer touring places--Washington D.C., for one, and spending time with my grandparents up in northern Utah--oh, yes, that's right. I spent the summer barefoot, living out of a suitcase, and jumping up and down on the tramp in the back yard...I read Lord of the Rings for the first time, and retold parts to my cousins (freaking them out--they're all younger them me and didn't know what lord of the rings was, so the idea of the ringwraiths got me big cool points with them). And I also inherited the first garden I really ever worked in by myself.
What are 5 things you need to do today?
1. Study for my floral I.D. quiz next Tuesday
2. Try and relax, just a tad
3. Figure out what Sunday meetings I'll have to go to tomorrow
4. Go pick up "A Great and Terrible Beauty" from the library (it just cam in! I had it on hold)
5. Clean my room
What are some snacks you enjoy?
A sharp tangy apple right in the middle of working outside, a handful of carrots in the middle of a boring lecture, icecream on hot summer days, and a symphany bar for the sad lonely days
What would you do if you were a billionaire?
Travel more then anything else, do my best to help as many people as I can, buy my parents a beautiful house, put my kids (non-existant though they may currently be) through school, and otherwise live like I have no more money then anyone else. Average house, average car...though, i must admit, I would probably splurge just a tad on the garden.
What are 3 bad habits?
Feeling guilty/sad for things that logically shouldn't, keeping my room in constant disarray, and greeting women with a "what's up guys?"
Name 5 places you have lived.
Provo, Utah
Bamburg, Germany
Hinesville, Georgia
Bellevue, Nebraska
Ft. Leavenworth, Kansas
What are 5 jobs you've had?
BYU Tree Crew Person
BYU Janitorial Student
BYU Greenhouse staff
Lifeguard (in Georgia, Nebraska, and Utah)
Telemarketer (I tried to convince people to refinance their houses--it didn't work)
I'm really sorry for doing this, but I was looking over something I wrote last summer (it's what I want to send off to what ever editor I victimize) and I couldn't figure out what was wrong with the first chapter...I mean, I can FEEL that something is just little off, but I can't put my finger on it...so I'm giving it you, in hopes that you can help. This first chapter is 3.5K.
Some things you should know: I wrote this knowing that if it were to ever be published it would appeal to a mostly female audience, a YA one at that. So while none of you are in fact a part of my target audience, I am confident that you will be able to look past this and give me some good solid feed back.
And of course live journal has messed with my formatting.
Questions: is the language too formal (stiff)?
Is it too cliche to start with her waking up and getting ready?
Is the part with the grandma okay, with the knowledge that we will not be seeing this woman again until the very end of the book?
Do I go over board on the thought processes?
That's all I can think of for now. Enjoy. (I hope)
See yah Thursday.
See yah!
Yeph, definitely not posting this week. Better luck next time, I hope. I'll still be reading your submittals though.
Plot change: I’ve decided that she didn’t leave her initials at the bottom of the letter (2 entry’s ago), so that their task can be a little more difficult.
Tell me what you think!
Profile
![[info]](http://l-stat.livejournal.com/img/userinfo.gif)
318_rachel_2- 318_rachel_2
Syndicate
